One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this development outwiegh the disadvantages?
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the hospital
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the elderly
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a serious situation
serious situations
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person
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death
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everything
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equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
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toproceed
to stay
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staying
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negativity, and proceed with exercises Correct your spelling
avoid
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a daily basis to live longer stay stable in life, yet close to your family and peers.Change preposition
on
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