One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this development outwiegh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays the public
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, that living in
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m3dical
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is a true success to stay alive, and getting well treatments from examiners as a chance to feel as safe as much you are at
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, especially elderly people.
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, I will explore
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the advantages of
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perspective and provide examples, explaining
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thought.
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impact, yet to provide a clear opinion of how do I feel about their point of
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. I will start with positive thoughts of dealing with medical
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place to deal with in life to get a recovery from any kind of injuries, but it is hard to create it as a living place, like a
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to
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community. But on some points, if they were in
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they should understand, that it is essential to be there as an example; when an elder
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person
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death
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he should get into a
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process
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should not hesitate about it because with his
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provide great results to remain mentally and physically well being.
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, it could help them in
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beneficially
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ways by
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by obtaining medicines and multiple arrangements to
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a check-up
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health
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.
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, through living difficulties and unstable regulations and economy,
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thus
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kind of impacts made the Authority's to apply via taxation regulations like what happened in The United States of America, Canada etc... Went
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increasing in taxes and
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society into craziness, duo to bad income via civilians
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thoroughly
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above
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public applied for Health insurance as a plan B solution for them, yet not
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under insurance, so should preprepare for
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way to proceed
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; when patients stay at
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for a long time around 5 to 7 years,
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though will directly interrupt his
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relatives
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good
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of his conditions despite he can avoid while eating healthy, doing exercises and saving
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amount of money to complete what he
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achieve when he was younger especially he reach
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why? Because without saving and staying in a flexible manner
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he will
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a great opportunities
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to achieve what he is capable of. To sum up, medical treat advanced
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and increasing through taxation process will
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tell peak point when society realise something wrong and need to minimize it. In my opinion, I recommend
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healthy,
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avoid
negativity, and proceed with exercises
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a daily basis to live longer stay stable in life, yet close to your family and peers.
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