Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in zoos. Others believe that there are good reasons for having zoos. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Since the dawn of
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time
times
wild Add a comma
,times
animals
are kept in zoos
all over world
. Add an article
the world
This
is a controversial issue. At present, zoos
are tourist
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a tourist
attraction
in many countries and need wild Fix the agreement mistake
attractions
animals
to attract visitors. I beleve
that they should not be kept in Correct your spelling
believe
zoos
and there should be alternative places to see them. This
essay will discuss both sides and an opinion will be put forth.
There are many good reasons to not build zoos
in our cities. 1) First
of all, god’s precius
gifts need to live in their natural habitat. Correct your spelling
precious
Furthermore
, zoos
are no place for wild things. If animals
need to be cared for, they should be looked after in theier
natural Correct your spelling
their
habitat
in game parks or wildlife reserves. Change to a plural noun
habitats
Goverments
should look after the precious wild Correct your spelling
Governments
Government
animals
at
their country and should close down Change preposition
in
zoos
that profit for
them. 2) Another valid reason to support Change preposition
from
this
view is that people can see wild animals
on the internet, or in books. They don’t need to visit htem
in cages where they are sick or dying. Correct your spelling
them
Moreover
, These zoos
try to make money from animals
misery and they don’t care of
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about
animals
welfare. Change to a genitive case
animal's
animals'
A recent
research in Harvard shows that 89% of all wild Remove the article
Recent
animals
die in cages. 3) In addition
to this
, we should allow animals
to live in the wild. They can be healthy in their own habitat, they can hunt and have normal behaviour. They cannot do this
in a zoo. In the future, if man
wants to see wild Add an article
a man
the man
animals
, we must travel to their country and see them in the wild in their enviroment
and not ours.
In a Correct your spelling
environment
nutshell
people believe that Add a comma
,nutshell
zoos
are good places to keep wild animals
, I feel that we do not need zoos
anymore and we can look at wild animals
on the internet or travell
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travel
to
there and we can be happy for these wild Change preposition
apply
creature
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creatures
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