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Large business's have big budget for promotions and advertisement and as a result of people gravitate towards them

#business #budget #promotions #advertisement #people #gravitate
Big
business
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businesses
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 are spending
hefty
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amount
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 of money
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promotion
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the promotion
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 and advertisement of their brand.
Consequently
, the tend to buy their items has increased in
customers
that
is
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creating problems
such
 as
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 of
the
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customers
, businesses closure and unemployment. The
government
 should be taken some measures to tackle
this
 phenomenon. The
mega corporations
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mega-corporations
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 and multinational brands invest a huge amount of money in promulgation to attract the consumer's mind and more and more
customers
 have inclined towards them. As
the
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 consequence of
this
, People face
the
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loss in their businesses,
customers
 attrition, unemployment and monopoly in the markets.
Moreover
, after getting
monopoly
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 they don’t let authorities work and put pressure to not regulate quality.
Nevertheless
, some people believe that the
government
 should be taken it into account. Stat should impose
the
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 ban
at
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 these advertisements and promotions that are deceiving
public
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the public
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 by exaggerating
in
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the appreciation and benefits of products.
In addition
 ,the regulars should regulate the quality of
item
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items
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 without taking any pressure.
Furthermore
,
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government
 should encourage the
customers
 to shop from
coner
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corner
 shop by free advertising on national T.V channel and should
loans
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 to farmers and manufacturers to make good quality of products. In the conclusion,
government
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the government
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 should make laws to handle
this
 situation and should provide monetary support so they stand on their feet.
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