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The given chart provides information about the amount of a country's export earnings in different categories in the years 2015 and 2016. The table explains the percentage change of these categories of export in the
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 2016 as compared with 2015. Overall it can be depicted that in the years 2016 and 2015 the contribution of petroleum
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 and textiles was highest and lowest respectively.
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, the ratio of textile and jewellery increased and decreased respectively in the latter
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. As can be seen in the bar chart, in the
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 2015 the petroleum
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 and engineered goods contributed more in the export earnings as compared to other groups which were just above and almost 60
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dollars
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 respectively, while the contribution of gems and jewellery and the agricultural product was just above 40
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dollars
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 and a bit more than 30
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dollars
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 respectively.
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, that of textiles was almost 30
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dollars
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.
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, the percentage change in the value of petroleum
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, engineered goods, agricultural
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 and textiles increased in the
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 2016 by 3, 8.5, 0.81 and 15.24 per cent respectively, while the percentage in the value of gems and jewellery decreased by 5.18 per cent.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic migration
  • Asylum seeker
  • Diaspora
  • Expatriate
  • Refugee status
  • Work permit/visa
  • Demographic shift
  • Naturalization
  • Xenophobia
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Multiculturalism
  • Social cohesion
  • Immigration policies
  • Border control
  • Undocumented immigrants
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