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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, In many countries, the highly controversial topic is that whether to spend more funds in constructing railway tracks for fast
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 between cities or to use the fund in the improvement of existing public
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 facilities. In my opinion, the existing
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 should be enhanced.
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 with, many
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 in the country are of the opinion that
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trains
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 should be developed for linking different provinces. The development of
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trains
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 across various cities has many benefits.
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, less time of
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 will be consumed as they will be able to reach their destination quickly and easily.
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, the construction of new railway
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 will provide temporary as well as permanent employment to the
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 of the nation.
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, Japan being the most technologically advanced country enjoys the benefit of
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trains
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, as citizens here can commute easily and quickly.
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, many
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 there are employed in
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transportation
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 service.
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, a section of the society believes that the existing
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 should be improved. There is indeed a need to develop existing public
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 like bus service because the majority of the
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 who utilise
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working-class and not everyone can afford to travel in a
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 train,
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 by replacing the current mode of
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 with the electric
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 can improve the environment.
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, the construction of
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electric
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 will prove to be cost and environment friendly.
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, Vancouver has the facility of electric
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 as a public
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this
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 has improved the quality of life there, In fact, Vancouver has been listed in the top 10 cities in the world which has a quality life.
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, by using electric
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 greenhouse gas emissions can be prevented. To conclude, constructing a new mode of
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that is
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 the
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trains
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 is beneficial but improving the current facility to commute is more significant as it will be cost and environment friendly.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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