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Many people use distance-learning programs and study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the same benefit as attending collages or universities does. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people use distance-learning programs to learn at home
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 it is believed by some that it cannot give the benefit compared to attending
college
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 or
university
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. I believe that distance learning cannot give more benefits to study at home compared to attending
college
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 or
university
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. There are many reasons why it cannot give the benefit compared to attending
college
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 or
university
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. The
first
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reason
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 is that if
students
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 attend
college
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 or
university
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 lectures, they will solve their doubts at a time. In
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 way, they enhance their knowledge and make their career in a specific field. The
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reason
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 is that they become extroverts.
Students
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 make friends and share their ideas with their friends. The
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reason
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 is that
students
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 cannot do only group learning in a class but
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 participate in group discussions. They know about others views, opinions, ideas and take suggestions. To quote an example, in India, because of covid-19,
students
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 are learning at home by attending online classes but it is difficult for them to clear their problems. Another
reason
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 is that
students
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 focus on their studies because of
presence
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the presence
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 of
teacher
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a teacher
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. In online lectures, they use social media applications and talking with their friends, playing games, watching movies or videos. So, they cannot take more scores from their teachers and distract their minds. In conclusion, I would like to reiterate that online classes cannot give more benefits compared to offline classes.
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