Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Before talking about the essential role of death
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, you have to think about the meaning, and the purpose, of any kind of
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. If you consider that the purpose is to prevent the guilty from being nasty again, you can be seduced by an argumentation in favour of the suppression of capital
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. But you have to think about another aspect of the problem: a
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useful to impress people, to make them fear the law. In fact, let's take the example of a young misfit, which has grown in a violent atmosphere, influenced by older delinquents, etc. He lives in the streets, he's got no aim but to survive.
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is the kind of person who could possibly kill someone for money, or even for fun. Why would he fear prison? Life would be easier for him there.
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, in many cases, when you behave normally, you can benefit from
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reductions.
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young misfit needs to be impressed; he needs to know that the law is a frontier. When you cross it, you can lose your life.
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why capital
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helps keeping a distance between robbery and murder. If you abolish it, you suppress the difference between these two types of crime, which are completely different. But there is
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a limit to define: even if death
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is unavoidable, it would be a crime to apply it to inadequate cases. If there is no premeditation or past facts which can justify
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, it is far too strict to apply death
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.
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why the lawmakers have to establish precisely the context in which capital
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can be pronounced.
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the price to pay to limit violence without using excessive violence.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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