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Today more and more people are using mobile phones and computers. Thus, people are losing the ability to communicate face to face. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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We are eye-witnesses to how the rapid development of technology led to the emergence of faster and more effective ways of communication.
This
 is in turn followed by the increasing number of
people
 depending on mobile phones and computers to exchange information.While some
people
 believe
such
 a trend will undermine the skills for
people
 to communicate
face
 to
face
, I disagree with
this
 opinion to a great extent. Admittedly, communicating with
others
 in real life is not simply about talking. Eye contact, facial expression and body
language
also
 contribute to successful
face
 to
face
 conversation as these skills make the listeners pay more attention to your content and promote better understandings. Without good control in the eyes and facial expression, some
people
 may be too embarrassed and nervous to start or continue a conversation with
others
.
However
, by texting and typing messages we
also
 practise our ability to combine words into sentences in our minds and eventually express ourselves.
For instance
, when having diverse opinions on the internet,
people
use
 logic and evidence to demonstrate their ideas and to argue with
people
 of different opinions.
Furthermore
, some communication applications on phones and computers have a function called video call, which allows
people
 to see the image of
others
' faces during a conversation.
In addition
, switching from talking
face
 to
face
 to methods with more connection with technology only changes the medium of connection. With expressing ideas and exchanging thoughts as human nature, an individual should be able to
use
 their
language
 to communicate no matter what medium they
use
. To sum up,
although
 increasing dependence on technology in communication may lead to reduced practice for using eye contact, facial expression and body
language
 which
also
 play a significant role in communicating with
others
 in real life, there is little difference between the two methods in terms of
language
use
 and the ability to communicate is an instinct.
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  • digital communication platforms
  • convenience
  • efficiency
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  • enhance
  • bridging long distances
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