Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members how to be good members of society. Others, however believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It is said by some
people
that
children
should be taught to become a decent citizen of the society while others
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argue
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of school. In my opinion, I believe that both have
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unique impact on
children
’s upbringing.
To begin
with it, many
people
think
children
can get every life
lession
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lesson
lessons
from their family members, especially from elders. It
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it
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absolutely true that
parents
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to show themselves to be
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, mature,and long-sighted
then
children
may acquire social ideals, ethical understanding, decent behaviour, and other useful skills from their
parents
.
Therefore
,
family
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is
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first
platform that provides basic and informal learning to
children
.
Besides
,
children
's mental health and behaviour depend on their
parents
' treatment.
In contrast
, educational institutions
such
as schools and daycares
also
help to the development of better human beings in youngsters.
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school, young minds are exposed to a wide range of influences, including instructors, classmates, and so on. They can encounter various
people
with different views and backgrounds that attempt to develop their socialization process from that beginning. The rules and regulations in these institutions can make them more disciplined.
Moreover
, schools can teach their
children
how to become
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decent
person
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people
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in the future through reasonable teaching
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, which
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a
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essential role in
children
’s life. In conclusion, despite
people
having different views on
this
topic, I would say that it is not only
parents
responsibility but
also
education institutions are responsible to make them
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good human
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for our society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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