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the life cycle of the honey bee. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagram gives some data about the life period of the honey bee. Overall, the diagram had been shown 6 stages and there are approximately from 34
days
 to 36
days
 in
this
process
.
This
process
 was commenced by females bees, they lay some
eggs
 and
to
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finish getting maturity.
First
 of all, the life cycle commences with the females lay
eggs
. On average, females lays almost one or two
eggs
 each three
days
. These
eggs
 hatch after almost
at
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between 9 - 10
days
, a new
process
 appears in the result, and being named nymph moults. There are 3 times growing in
this
process
 and the
days
 are different (5
days
, 7
days
, 9
days
 respectively). On the one hand, in the result of
this
process
 creates young adult emerges. In the
next
 4
days
, the bees continue to grow in size.
Finally
, the honey bees reach
to
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maturity from
beginning
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the beginning
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • life cycle
  • laying of eggs
  • queen bee
  • hatch into larvae
  • rapid growth
  • develop into pupae
  • significant transformation
  • emergence of the adult bee
  • matures fully
  • cyclical nature
  • colony’s survival
  • reproduction process
  • subsequent generations
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