It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

It is essential to teach
children
difference
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between right and wrong during their childhood. It is considered, by giving
punishment
they can learn easily
this
distinction. I completely agree with
this
opinion because
children
are our future they should know the meaning of ethical manner.
Firstly
, it is very important for
children
to have
knowlege
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knowledge
about right and wrong.
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the
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early age, they are malleable, we can teach them whatever we want to.
Also
, they can learn easily and follows it throughout
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life.
In
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this
age pupils only see their
parents
and teachers they do not have
understanding
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an understanding
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of friends and other people.
Likewise
, it will be beneficial for them to be familiar with negative and positive
coscience
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conscience
science
before having contact with others.
Moreover
,
parents
and
teacher
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should get some strict action, if
children
have done
mistake
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and they should give them
punishment
.
Secondly
,
punishment
is only the way
children
learn and remember that
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should not allow
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this
again, it is a bad thing. There are many types of
punishment
parents
and teachers can follow like, they should give them toys or do not talk to them for a day. It will definitely
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to impose some manner on them because they just want
parents
around them and talk as well as they love toys,
this
punishment
also
teaches a lesson to obey the rules what
parents
sets. It is a lesson for the life from
parents
to follow the lane which
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positive and right. In conclusion, it is necessary to learn
difference
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the difference
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between ethical and
non ethical
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means, and it is only possible
by
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parents
or
teacher
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teachers
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to teach their
children
in
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an early age.
This
menner
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manner
will help in future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • punishment
  • positive reinforcement
  • consequences
  • time-outs
  • removal of privileges
  • open communication
  • clear expectations
  • consistency
  • fairness
  • disciplinary action
  • proportionate
  • moral values
  • internalization
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