THE NUMBER OF PEOPLE WHO ARE AT RISK OF SERIOUS HEALTH PROBLEMS DUE TO BEING OVERWEIGHT IS INCREASING. WHAT IS THE REASON FOR GROWTH IN OVER WEIGHT PEOPLE IN SOCIETY . HOW CAN THIS PROBLEM BE SOLVED .

Obesity has become one of the major reasons for various health issues in numerous people. The trend of having processed
food
and lack of
exercises
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are the contributing factors to the increasing numbers of obese people, to add on work these days are
sedantry
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sedentary

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and
requires
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no physical activities. we would look at the problems in depth in the following paragraphs. As mentioned before, processed
food
has become the popular
consummable
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consumed by the consumer. These
consists
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of unhealthy substances which in turn affects the
body
and its metabolism.
However
, people enjoy these meals because they are ready to make and affordable, and they overlook the contents of
product
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. The other factor that contributes towards obesity is lack of exercise or inactivity, Human -beings have become very reliant on
machineries
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types of machinery
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and
hence
have created
flabs
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instead
of abs.
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, works these days are very
sedantry
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sedentary

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as well, bringing the level of
an
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activity of an individual
further
down.
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it can be said that
,
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unhealthy
food
and lack of exercise are the factors that
leads
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to obesity.
Neverthless
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, there is
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a way to bring back health , which would involve having healthy
food
and engaging oneself in
exercises
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.
This
could be done by following a schedule given by the health instructor, which would include strict diet plans and exercises. Offices and can
also
introduce activities that
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physical games to encourage workers to move around.
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there are these
smart watches
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that
alerts
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the time of inactivities,
this
could be used as reminders to avoid sitting in one place for too long.
Hence
, it is extremely important to maintain the weight of the
body
as it could have an adverse effect on the
body
's immune system and make the
body
susceptible to various diseases.
Therefore
exercise and diet are two important factors to curb
this
issue.
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