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Some people say Technology is important. To what extent do you agree?

#people #technology
Now, the worldwide
population
 is about nine
billions
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 people, but from
the
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ancient
times
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 society has worked hard to develop, to improve
life
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 standards, to discover and to control everything on the Earth and
also
 what
it
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is beyond its limits. The
last
 two decades in which many advancements in
the
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IT
technology
 were registered is argued that might have brought a lot of good new opportunities or a series of serious consequences for the
population
. A big
percent
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 of the global
population
 enjoy using the actual
technology
 in order to make their lives more easy, interesting, or even more affordable.
To begin
, the enormous network
known
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 as
World
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the World
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 Wide Web
which
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help
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 people to keep themselves informed about the things that are happening across the world, to link new virtual relationships, to download entertaining materials like music or movies, and to continue, the simple idea of communication through email that help
normal
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 individual but
also
 big companies from any part of the globe to stay in touch with his or her friends and of course their business partners.
On the other
hand
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 IT
technology
 has developed to a very high level, creating sometimes negative effects on
population
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. If we take a closer look
to
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 the evolution of
the
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interpersonal communication, we will
unfortunately
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 discover that the modern individual communicates at least eighty
percent
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 through the inter-medium of the virtual space and only twenty
percent
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 will meet other people.
In addition
, the
labor
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 market has been so utilized that it replaces a big part of the human
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workforce
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work force
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workforce
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 need. Because of
this
fact
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 the contemporary society
face
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 higher unemployment rates, and an unsecured future is created for the
next
 generations. In conclusion, IT
technology
 is very useful for nowadays society, creating many new opportunities in different fields of activity, but when the limits are crossed and the
population
 does not control anymore these gadgets there is a problem and can have serious consequences among the healthy development of the human beings.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • online marketplaces
  • mobile payment options
  • personalized advertising
  • accessibility
  • compare prices
  • decision fatigue
  • impulse buying
  • financial imprudence
  • privacy and data security
  • transformed
  • streamlined
  • user-friendly
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