Schools are spending more time teaching traditional subjects such as history. Some people think they should rather spend more time in teaching skills that can help students find a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In recent years, there is a growing concern
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the allocation of students studying time at school. When students are spending most of their time learning history and other
subjects
, it is argued that
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schools
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shools
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should teach more about necessary working
skills
which can help them prepare well before entering into the labour market.
However
, I disagree with
this
argument because I think both
subjects
and
skills
share the same importance to help
graduates
find a job. History and other
subjects
such
as geography play
an
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cruel role in
childrens’
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mental development. Since children begin to explore the world in their
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shool
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life, it is necessary to provide
such
learners
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common knowledge of their surroundings.
For example
, they should study geography to understand their location with other countries and
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between them in a world
that is
ruled by globalization.
Moreover
, it is important for pupils to gadget a historical background that eases any sense of insecurity and uncertainty. Studying historical events can
reinforces
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a sense of belonging in youth and help them draw the contour of the future.
Thus
, it is essential to reserve a place for
subjects
in schools for the sake of students’ mental health.
On the other hand
, if life and working
skills
are faded in the curriculum,
graduates
will encounter issues of unemployment or losing jobs.
Therefore
, it is significant to develop
skills
such
as computing and communication in
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school life. Nordic countries,
for instance
, are well-known for their successful education and national welfare, which can attribute to a comprehensive learning system in academic years. They focus on
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children's
children
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computational basics and polish their communication
skills
as well as
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opportunity
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opportunities
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for learners to self-learn traditional
subjects
.
As a result
,
graduates
who have already possessed certain
skills
fulfilling social needs can find a job with a good salary but
also
keep a healthy social environment in workplaces. In conclusion, from my point of view, it is important to split time equally to traditional curriculum and social
skills
which can help learners find their preferred careers. Only
this
method can aid
graduates
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in
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competition-intensified world.
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