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Some parents want their children to read only serious educational books at all times.They don't wantbtheir children tobread any entertainment books because they think it is a waste of time.Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?why?

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reading is waste if not educational agree disagree
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 are educational expressions
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knowledge
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star wars
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 interviews educational
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 arent necessarily beneficial when forced
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 no background Reading is an intellectual activity that benefits
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. There are some parents who believe that reading
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 written for
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 purposes is
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wasteful
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. I entirely disagree with
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 view and think that reading brings tremendous benefits regardless of genre.
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books
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 are as beneficial as academic
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Children
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 can learn new vocabulary and improve literacy by being exposed to written words.
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, reading
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books
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 is an effective way to
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increase
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 in a child, which undoubtedly enriches their life and assists them in academic attainment.
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, a fan book of the well-known Sci-Fi film 'Star Wars' contains educational content
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 as the script of the interviews with the casts through which
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 gain
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 about the
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 industry while improving their reading skills. Some people might argue that the advantage of academic
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 far outweighs that of
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 in other genres. While it is true that
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 acquired from
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books
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 has direct implications in
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's studies, I feel that
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 do not necessarily reap the benefit from reading them.
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 is because motivation plays a vital role in their development. When a child is forced to read
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 that they are not interested in or they do not feel relevant to, it is most likely that they end up just tracing the words while ignoring the content. In conclusion, I strongly disagree with the idea that only educational
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