The old generation often hold traditional ideas about the correct way of life, thinking and behavior. However, some people think that these ideas are not helpful for young people to prepare for modern life. To what extent do agree or disagree?

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People

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divided the correct

way

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life

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old ones traditional

ideas

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are best.On the other ,hand few individuals believe

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concept is not beneficial to youngsters to be ready for the modern world.In recent

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internet changed our

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life

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lives

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so much lot of traditional

thinks

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things

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developed so I personally agree with the second concept. First

foremost

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and foremost

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, all humans are different from

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paths, experiences,

views

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and views

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life

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even where they come from.

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trying to hold old traditional theories about the correct

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of a live an entire population is impossible.For ,example one young adult girl living his

life

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the correct

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away from drugs but she got cancer at 22 old so she

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to shave his hair

however

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people

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when

looking

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apply

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in public

they

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apply

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judge her for inappropriate hair but she didn't choose that hairstyle.

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holding all human beings to judge and hold them is not the correct step

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people

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live in a fast-paced world and democratic society so holding

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people

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ideas

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or judging

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way

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the way

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looks

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is inappropriate.In some nations

created

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and

added their

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adding

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law to not judge or

forcing

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your

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is legal.

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Sweden there is a law that

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to get dressed charge 500$ it may sound ridiculous but there are a lot of countries adding it up.

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holding

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about the correct

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life

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is becoming illegal. In conclusion,

this

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idea is not suitable for all

people

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because the

way

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life

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is changing from time to time.Especially nowadays thinking about 10 years from now humans changed our view too.Personally, I believe forcing 7 billion

people

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to live the same is impossible when if

people

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trying

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try

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it becomes socialism.The Soviets showed that it

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was

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hopeless so it

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was

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not helpful at all

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task response

The essay lacks focus and coherence. The points are not developed effectively, and the essay fails to provide a comprehensive response to the prompt. The arguments are not clearly presented and the examples lack depth and relevance.

coherence and cohesion

The essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion. The progression of ideas is unclear, and there is limited use of linking words and cohesive devices. This affects the overall coherence and cohesion of the essay.

Your opinion

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If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

289 words

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The old generation often hold traditional ideas about the correct way of life, thinking and behavior. However, some people think that these ideas are not helpful for young people to prepare for modern life. To what extent do agree or disagree?

Your opinion

You were doing a short course at another country. All of a sudden, you had to leave the course and fly back to your home country. Write a letter to your teacher, and in your letter – express your gratitude – explain why you had to leave – explain what part of the course you enjoyed the most

Some people think that consumerism can boost the economy and create business and jobs. Others consider that society becomes a 'throw-away society' producing unnecessary waste. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The world natural resources are consumed at an ever-increased rate. What are the causes of this situation? What are the solutions?

Government should put taxes on unhealthy food so that people eat healthy foods more. Do you agree or disagree?

It is commonly believed that nowadays main factors that affect a child’s development are media, pop culture and friends. A different point of view is that family plays the most significant role. discuss both views and give your opinion.