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Today the quality of life in large cities is decreasing. State the causes and solutions.

#quality #life #cities
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There has been a downsize in the
quality
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 of
life
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 of those
people
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 who love in the big
cities
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.
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 discuss the main reasons for
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 problem are ever-increasing
pollution
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 and the hectic work schedule of the population in these areas with suggestions to mitigate
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 issue. The main causes for the deterioration in the
people
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life
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's
quality
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 are increased
pollution
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 and the busy routine of individuals in cityside.
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,
smoke-emission
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smoke emission
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 from the industries and factories in
cities
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 pollute the environment leading to
intake
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the intake
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 of polluted
air
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 by
people
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 while breathing.
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, noise
pollution
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 from the traffic congestion in these areas results in agitated and infuriated behaviour in
general
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 public.
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 but not the least, a large number of
people
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 residing in
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 places fail to maintain
healthy
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a healthy
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 lifestyle due to their extended working hours.
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, Large
cities
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population
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populations
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 have to work overtime to meet the high cost of living which
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 leads to
sedentary
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a sedentary
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 and unhealthy
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lifestyle
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life-style
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lifestyle
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. Possible
sollutions
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solutions
 to these problems are to reduce
the
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air
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pollution
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 by shifting factories and industries to
outskirts
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the outskirts
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. If
people
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 will use more public transport in comparison t private vehicles, the negative effect of traffic congestion will be reduced and
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pollution free
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pollution-free
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air
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 for
people
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.
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, spending few hours on leisure activities,
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, sports, dance and music will
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 improve the
life
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quality
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 of
people
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 living in big metro
cities
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such
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 as Delhi. To conclude,
air
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pollution
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, noise
pollution
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 by factories and traffic congestion respectively are the main causes of decrease in the
quality
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 of
life
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people
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 used to spend in metro
cities
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further
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 tight working deadlines in these
cities
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 worsen the problem which could be solved by shifting industries to outskirts and sparing sometime by
people
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 for physical activities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Overpopulation
  • Strained resources
  • Commute times
  • Economic stress
  • Community events
  • Affordable housing
  • Environmental regulations
  • Green spaces
  • Urban environments
  • Socialize
  • Foster
  • Tackle
  • Strategies
  • Implementing
  • Pollution
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