Some people believe that software programming should be taught at primary school. Others think that the focus at this level should be on playing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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system has evolved over the past century, there are various
skills
and subjects that are included in today's academics
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were not there previously.
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skills
such
as computer programming
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still being debated over if it should be added
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the curriculum or children should just be engaged in games. We will discuss
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both these views in the following paragraphs.
To begin
with, the future is totally based on artificial
inteelligence
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intelligence
and it involves various technologies,
hence
children would be required to hone these
skills
at a very early age. Having computer as an academic subject would give them an
indepth
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in-depth
in depth
knowledge about its functioning.
For example
, Children are forced to study from home due to the current pandemic, and they are completely reliant on
the
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computers,
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has influenced the modern education system. In the wake of these advancements, it is
also
important to inculcate other extracurricular activities in a child
such
as sports and other field events. These would ensure that the child has proper development which includes physical, mental and emotional development.
For instance
, sports
such
as football will incorporate their group
skills
as well as help them in
thier
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their
physical growth. Games like chess will help in improving their memory and concentration.
Therefore
I believe, that there should be
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a balance
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between each subject
that is
been taught to the child
also
it is not a bad idea to introduce software programming at an early age.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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