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Today the qualtiy of life in large cities is decreasing. State the causes and solutions.

#qualtiy #life #cities
The
qualituy
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quality
 of life of
opeople
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people
 n big
cities
 has
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declined
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declines
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declined
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.
This
 essay shall discuss the main causes for the
prblem
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problem
, pollution and
hectc
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hectic
 work
schdedules
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schedules
 of
people
 with
suggestionds
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suggestions
 to
reduuce
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reduce
this
 problem. The main causes for the deterioration in the
people
 life's quality are increasing pollution and the busy routine of
individulas
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individuals
 in urban areas.
Firstly
, smoke emitted by the industries in large
cities
pollute
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 the environment leading to the intake of polluted air by folks.
Secondly
, excess noise produced by traffic congestion in
such
 areas results in
the
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agitated and infuriated behaviour in the general public.
Last
 but not the least, a large
nummber
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number
 of
people
 living in these places fail to
maintan
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maintain
 a healthy lifestyle due to the extended working hours. For
exacpmle
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example
,
population
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a population
the population
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 which reside in metro
cities
 have to work overtime to meet the high cost of living
hiwhc
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high
further
 leads to
sedentary
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a sedentary
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 and
unhealhty
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unhealthy
healthy
 lifestyle. Possible solutions to these issues are to clean the air by shifting factories to
outskirts
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the outskirts
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. if
people
 will use more public transport in
comaprison
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comparison
 to
orivate
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private
vehickes
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vehicles
,
negative
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the negative
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 effect of
over crowding
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overcrowding
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 of
vehciles
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vehicles
 will be reduced and
this
 will mean
pollution free
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pollution-free
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environemnt
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environment
 for the
socieyt
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society
..
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Furtheror
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Further
Furthermore
, sparing few hours by
individulas
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individuals
 for leisure activities,
for example
, sports, dance and music will
also
 improve
the
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their
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 well-being
of
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them
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. To conclude, pollutions by factories and traffic are the main reasons for
decrease
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the decrease
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 in the quality of life which could be solved by moving industries to open areas. Apart from that, tight
wokr
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work
 deadlines of
people
 in metropolitan
cities
 worsen the problem which could be eased by spending
sometime
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some time
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 on physical
activites
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activities
.
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