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The education you receive from your family is more important than the education you receive from school. To what extent do you agree with this statement and why?

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Education
 from
parents
 has a vital role in building a better relationship with their
children
.
However
,
education
 in
schools
 has more things that
parents
 cannot teach their
children
. I believe
education
 in
schools
 plays a more important role in solving adolescent issues and establishing
children
’s diverse
values
 than
education
 from their
parents
.
This
 essay will discuss two main benefits of instruction in
schools
 and reasons to support my opinion.
Firstly
,
schools
 can sympathize with
children
’s physical concerns and offer classes about physical growth in adolescents to solve their worries. Generally,
children
 are so sensitive that they are not willing to confide their physical problems to their
parents
. Because
children
 tend to consider their secondary growth embarrassing, they hesitate to share the anxiety with their
parents
.
However
,
schools
 can cope with
this
 problem by providing them with health and physical classes. In
such
 courses, teachers explain and illustrate what is happening in
children
’s bodies, which can teach them secondary physical growth is just one of the processes of becoming adults and
thus
 relieve their stress of having unclear physical concerns.
Secondly
,
children
 can broaden their perspectives in
schools
. Generally, families share common
values
 as they spend much time together;
however
, they can interact with other students with different
values
 in
schools
.
For example
, in an international school, there are many people coming from different countries with diverse cultural and academic backgrounds.
Children
 can be involved in multiple
values
 through interactions with these students.
Although
 sometimes they have quarrels and trouble interacting with other unfamiliar and incompatible people,
this
 is rather beneficial to develop perspective as failures are
also
 great materials. Overall,
education
 in
schools
 has more benefits than
education
 from
parents
;
schools
 can provide classes solving student’s personal concerns and opportunities to enlarge their perspectives.
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