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New technologies and ways of buying and selling are transforming the lives of consumers. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Technological advancement has provided many benefits to us, and
this
also
 applies to commerce. The new technology has changed the way make purchases and sell online. I believe the development enables us to lead more convenient lives by offering more useful purchasing methods.
This
 essay will suggest two positive changes of buying and selling online and reasons to support my opinion.
Firstly
,
consumers
 have many options when shopping online, and they can make the best choices.
For example
,
consumers
, who want to buy new clothes online, have various options, from chain shops with low prices to high brand shops. When they cannot decide between products from two different stores, they can immediately compare their prices.
Thus
, they can make the best choice depending on their financial situation and feel satisfied with the purchased product.
Secondly
,
food
 delivery services have developed owing to the advancement in technology. As the number of people living busy lives increases, the number of users utilizing a delivery
food
 service grows. With a delivery service application,
consumers
 can immediately order what they want to eat depending on their mood, and the
food
 will soon arrive at their home. Generally, in
such
 services, the contents and nutrients of the
food
 that customers order are indicated and explained in detail.
Therefore
, it is easy for them to choose whether light or heavy meals they eat and
thus
 control their diets. Overall, technological advancement has provided
consumers
 with more convenient ways to buy or order a product online, enabling them to lead highly satisfying and healthier lives.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transforming
  • consumers
  • buying and selling
  • new technologies
  • revolutionized
  • consumer experience
  • e-commerce
  • convenience
  • range of options
  • mobile payment systems
  • transactions
  • challenges
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