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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same
things
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 and avoiding
change
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.
Change
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 : The word defines to modify and to tend
ourself
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 with current situation and circumstances. Every individual has to implement
few
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a few
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 changes in their
life
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 either personally or professionally. A small
change
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 in
life
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 can help to define
life
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 goals which leads to
achieve
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achieving
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 specific
milestone
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milestones
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. It is more important to
change
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ourself
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ourselves
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 with the situation
that is
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 in demand rather than to be an
ordinay
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ordinary
 individual. Some people think that a
change
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 in their behaviour or activity will
led
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lead
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 them
degrade
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 themselves and have fear of loss and disrespect.
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 others, consider it as an opportunity to join the new community and to learn new
things
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. They think that it will help them to sustain
in
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themselves in
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 society as they can
adopt
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adapt
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changes
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to changes
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 easily. In my
views
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view
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, Learning new
things
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 and
to adopt
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apply
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changes is a part of
life
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 and one has to be focussed on upgrading own skills and knowledge with market demand. We will only survive
,
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apply
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 if we will upgrade
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ourself
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ourselves
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 with recent trends. I can give you an example of two individuals who are working in
a
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the
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 same company, at the same designation and their mindset. Suraj is working as an assistant
in
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at
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 ABC,
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and who
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who
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he
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 always
think
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thinks
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to
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about working
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work
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 by his own ethics and decisions.
Whereas
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, Urvashi
is having
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has
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 a different mindset to
work
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. She used to
work
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 in a planned and systematic way which
are
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is
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 provided by their superiors. In recent times,
due to
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implementation
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the implementation
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 of new technology in
company
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the company
a company
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; every
employees
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employee
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are
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is
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 required to attain some sort of
trainings
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training
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 and to upgrade their skills in available fields. Here, Suraj thinks that if he
will learn
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learns
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 new
things
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then
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 he will have to move out of his comfort zone and will have to
work
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 more time
due to
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 which he
did't
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didn't
 appear for any training or skill sessions.
Whereas
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, Urvashi has appeared for all possible
trainings
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training
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 and learning sessions to upgrade herself so that she can deal with all possible situations. As time flows, Suraj will have to
loose
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lose
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 his job
due to
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lack
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a lack
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 of knowledge and skills which were demanded by
a
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the
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 company.
Hence
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,
to conclude
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 on the topic of
Change
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; It is more important to update
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ourself
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ourselves
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 with market demand rather than being
a
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an
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 ordinary person whose values will get defamed in upcoming opportunities.
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  • predictability
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  • equilibrium
  • progress
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