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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The given diagram illustrates and compares
road
 access to a
city
 hospital in
year
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 2007 and in 2010 after the redevelopment plan. In
year
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 2007, there was a single
road
 that connected
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the hospital
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hospital
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hospitals
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 to
city
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the city
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road
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roads
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. People could enter from either
hospital
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the hospital
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road
 or the gate where combined parking used to be. Combine parking consisted of parking for
public
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the public
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as well as
 staff. Six
indivdual
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individual
 bus stops could be located, three on either side of
hospital
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the hospital
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road
. By 2010, there were major changes. To tackle
increased
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an increased
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 load of vehicles,
a
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new public parking was found situated east
to
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of
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 the hospital.
Old
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The old
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 parking lot was assigned to staff members only. There were two new
roundabout
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roundabouts
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 on hospital
road
 to deal with traffic joining
ring
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the ring
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road
 and
city
road
. A dedicated bus station was introduced west to the hospital
road
.
To sum up
, in just three years,
major
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 development occurred which was
due to
increased
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an increased
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 number of people coming to
city
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the city
a city
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hospital
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hospitals
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. It
also
 indicates that more people got injured in 2010 when compared to 2007.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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