The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The given diagram illustrates and compares
road
access to a
city
hospital in
year
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2007 and in 2010 after the redevelopment plan. In
year
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2007, there was a single
road
that connected
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the hospital
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hospital
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hospitals
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to
city
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the city
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road
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roads
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. People could enter from either
hospital
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the hospital
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road
or the gate where combined parking used to be. Combine parking consisted of parking for
public
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the public
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as well as
staff. Six
indivdual
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individual
bus stops could be located, three on either side of
hospital
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the hospital
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road
. By 2010, there were major changes. To tackle
increased
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an increased
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load of vehicles,
a
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new public parking was found situated east
to
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the hospital.
Old
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parking lot was assigned to staff members only. There were two new
roundabout
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on hospital
road
to deal with traffic joining
ring
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the ring
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road
and
city
road
. A dedicated bus station was introduced west to the hospital
road
.
To sum up
, in just three years,
major
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development occurred which was
due to
increased
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an increased
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number of people coming to
city
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the city
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hospital
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hospitals
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. It
also
indicates that more people got injured in 2010 when compared to 2007.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words road, city with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic flow
  • road access
  • ring road
  • bus stops
  • bus station
  • congestion
  • parking facilities
  • pedestrian crossings
  • vehicular flow
  • organizational structure
  • accessibility
  • enhancements
  • configuration
  • dedicated
  • diverting traffic
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