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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic Television injects violence in children, and programs with violent scenes should be banned. Do you agree or disagree with the statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Majority
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 of the people
belives
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believes
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 that the violent
content
 in
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TV
 shows is the primary reason
of
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for
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agression
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aggression
 in school children. To some
extent
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,extent
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 I believe
these
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this
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content
 should be banned from
a programs
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programs
a program
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boardcasted
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broadcasted
broadcaster
 for young
audiance
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audience
audiences
. In the following
paragraph
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 I will explain the reason for my notion.
Firstly
,
TV
 shows with
the
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brutual
content
 should be banned for the youth, as they increase the aggressiveness among the school children.
Secondly
, horror and action movies with
the
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agressive
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aggressive
content
 always provoke the young
audiance
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audience
 to perform the stunt.
For instance
, due to the Wrestling World Cup
kids
 has viewed the action
content
 ,
hence
 they ended up imitating the same in the
resedential
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residential
 society;
therefore
,
majority
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the majority
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 of them suffered
with
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from
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the
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fractures on their hands.
On the other hand
,
same
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the same
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tv
 shows are viewed by
majority
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the majority
a majority
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 of
kids
 but all are not
aggreesive
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aggressive
 in nature;
thus
,
the
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TV
 shows are not the major factor of violence among the
kids
. In
addtion
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addition
, Children with the
positve
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positive
attitute
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attitude
 are not impacted with the surrounding . They understand the impact of
content
 in shows and don't try to replicate the action scenes.
Thirdly
, youth were violent even before the
TV
 was invented. According to the studies, one
the
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 major source of
viloince
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violence
 is
illetracy
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illiteracy
, as the
majority
 of junivile in the US prison are
illetrate
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illiterate
illustrated
. In conclusion, it is clear
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from
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form
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from
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 the above examples that
illetracty
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illiteracy
 is the key factor for the
voilence
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violence
 among
kids
.
Consequently
, while banning the
curuel
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cruel
content
 on a
TV
 channel ,
government
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the government
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 should take
initiavte
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initiative
initiate
 to promote
the
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education among
kids
.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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