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Unmanned vehicles will become more and more popular in the future. Passengers travelling inside these robot cars will be only human. Do you think the benefits of these surpass the drawbacks?

There is an opinion that
driverless
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cars
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 will become more and more common in the future and the passengers will only be human. In my opinion, those
cars
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 bring a lot of
benefits
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 to
people
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, but it
also
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 brings limitations for them.
This
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Firstly
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, when
driverless
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cars
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 become popular in the future, the number of
people
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 using it will increase because it has many different
benefits
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. but those
benefits
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 will make
people
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 more dependent on technology. And that makes human laziness more and more developed according to the advanced level of the car.
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, we may be too dependent on the car to let children ride to school by themselves, which can lead to many dangers
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 as meeting robbers.
Second
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, if
driverless
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cars
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 become so common that they even replace normal
cars
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,
people
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 will have trouble transporting goods. Currently, it is very difficult for goods and heavy objects to be transported over long distances. Currently, it is very difficult for goods and heavy objects to be transported over long distances. If those advanced
cars
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 make
people
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 lazy, they don't want to work, but it only allows
people
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 to use
it
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them
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. So who will do those jobs? In conclusion,
driverless
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cars
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 will probably become popular and there are many
benefits
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 from them. But it will
also
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 bring limitations for
people
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such
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 as making
people
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 dependent on technology and making it difficult for
people
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 to work.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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