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Smoking not only harms the smoker, but also those who are nearby. Therefore smoking should be banned in public places. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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public property as a place for smoking.
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, it will harm not only us but who are around us. I believe that the government has to banned
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 in public places as it is an illegal and environmental hazard. In
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 will explain different paragraphs with examples. On the one hand, studies have proven that passive
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 are suffering from different lung diseases.
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, cancer and breathing problems are common in ages from starting till older people.
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, smoking has become a fashion everywhere,as youth follows the trend and smokes illegally in colleges and other places. For
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 reason, the government is
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 encouraging as they have more demand and imposes taxes on the public to avoid workplace hazards.
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,prohibiting smoking in workplaces always helps in stopping illnesses and other symptoms. For
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 reason,public awareness programmes help youth to stop buying products
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 are nicotine and toxic because it always protects family and friends who are near ones.
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, others opine that there are some challenges in stopping cigarette smoking because of chain
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.
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, work stress is one of the main reasons, as many youngsters are using smoking as a habit ,
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 can lead to worse situations and becomes toxic. For
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 logic, designated places are used in various workstations for public
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. To conclude,stopping smoking in public and private properties can be a positive effect on many citizens. Governing bodies need to impose fines and penalties on
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nicotine users as
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 is awful and helps others from illnesses.
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