Unmanned vehicles will become more and more popular in the future. Passengers travelling inside these robot cars will be only human. Do you think the benefits of these surpass the drawbacks?

Nowadays, many
peopl
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people
people's
claim that unmanned
vehicles
will play an ever-increasing role in the future. Passengers travelling inside these robot cars
ill
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be only human.
This
will bring many advantages to
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humans
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, but everything has
their
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its
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drawbacks. The question is,
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do
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the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
this
essay will
firstly
, discuss
about
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if the benefits surpass the drawbacks. It is worth considering the
venefits
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benefits
of unmanned
vehicles
.
Firstly
, it will decrease
the
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traffice
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traffic
accidents. Thousands of people die every year in
traffic
accidents. If we use the
unmmaned
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unmanned
vehicles
, people will not be die in
traffic
accidents because of drink, drowsy or
esle
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else
.
Secondly
, driverless
vehicles
will obey all posted speed limits and
traffic
control signs. It will make
traffic
jams become less and keep roads clean. But all
this
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advantages can surpass all the drawbacks of these? I don't think so.
Although
unmanned
vehicles
are more safety,
cost saving
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and
better
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traffice
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traffic
flow, there
are
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some
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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we need to consider. The
technology
will likely come with a high upfront cost. Covid 19 pandemic is destroying our economy, which
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it hard to pay for new
technology
.
Moreover
, many driving jobs could be lost to autonomous vehicle
technology
. One of the biggest disadvantage that it
make
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people more
depent
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dependent
depend
on
technology
.
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