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Should museums and art galleries be free of charge for the general public, or should a charge, even a voluntary charge, be levied for admittance? Discuss this issue, and give your opinion.

#museums #art #galleries #charge #admittance
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Currently, there is an ongoing debate about whether
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 ought to be available for everyone or should pay a charge for the entrance.
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 some people believe that free entry may bring various benefits to society, In my opinion raising the admission fee has more advantages.
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 with, the
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 and the art
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 require the funds to save their existence. If there is no ticket for entrance, the exhibitions may not be self-sufficient.
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, those expenses will be a burden on the government.
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, many
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 and
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 may suffer from a lack of sponsorship.
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, the general public should be charged an entry fee.
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 money can be used to give salary for the people who work there and the money can
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, if there is no entrance expense, more citizens can be encouraged to learn about art and history.
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 means that arts are more available for the public.
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, free
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 and
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 may have a positive impact on the development of education, as the schools can take their students to many cultural and historical exhibitions which can be useful for students. To conclude, a possible compromise would be that the
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 charge a reasonable amount of fee during their peak seasons in order to get funds for regular maintenance.
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, when it comes to off-season, they should be opened free of charge to the public. The
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 should be free for all children who are below 18 years.
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 would encourage them to visit these places and improve their knowledge of their history and culture.
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