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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this a positive or negative development?

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It is undeniable that the
world
 at the present has had changed into modern society. Many
people
 think that changing of the
world
 has affected to trading behaviour of humans because
people
 can buy the same
products
 or services anywhere, for many cities are becoming more and more similar production. From my point of view, I think that if
people
 can buy the same goods anywhere in the
world
, it will offer both positive and negative
impacts
. In the following paragraph, the reasons to support my opinion will be outlined in the detail. On the one hand, one of the advantages of becoming similar countries is that everyone in the community has no inequality in trading due to they are able to buy the same
products
 anywhere in the
world
, and there have more and more positive
impacts
to
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 the production industry.
For example
, if everybody uses the same telephone, many mobile phone industries will use the same materials to create the same phones.
On the other hand
, the importance of drawbacks of countries are becoming similar is that resources scarcity due to the demand of
people
are
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 increasing every day, but resources are decreasing every time. As the result, if goods are produced with the same materials every time,
this
 substance will not arise in society, and
people
 do not have the choices of buying which is the
basic
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 of economic systems
such
 as the population should have many options to make decisions to buy some
products
. In conclusion, I strongly think that many countries
have
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 changed in a similar direction can offer negative
impacts
 rather than positive
impacts
.
Although
 it can cause resource shortages, it can
also
 reduce the social wealth of the
populations
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population
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.
Therefore
, it is recommended that the
products
 should be created the different patterns so that
people
 can choose the goods to buy according to their satisfaction.
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