It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extend so you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Understanding the difference between what is correct and incorrect in
this
society is vital for any group age. One person's habit starts from an early stage. I believe discipline is part of any correction to some extent.  On one hand, to educate any child on what is acceptable and what is not in the world we live in limits the danger they might face in their coming life. 
Although
,
verbal
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discussion might be enough,
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does not put emphasis on it to the full extent.
For instance
, a student in class steals a book from the library and brings it home.
Firstly
, stealing any kind of material is a felony.
This
time might be a book,
similarly
, stealing a car might be in the future.
Instead
of putting him in detention, it might be best to correct
this
act verbally.
However
, if it happens continuously, I believe discipline should come
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place. By doing so,
this
child will be cautious of the idea that you are not meant to take what does not belong to you. 
Secondly
, there are different ways of trial when one does not do the Christian thing. To some extent, correcting children by some sort of method is more efficient than physical abuse. Punishment can set a boundary to limit the repetition of a mistake. Children starting from a young age should learn that every action has its consequence which shapes their mind in the future.  All in all, parents could start educating their kids about the difference between what is acceptable and what is unacceptable in the life we live in.
Besides
abuse, if verbal communication is able to be implemented and proves that it working, suffering could be the
last
option to be taken of.
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