*Assignment* In some countries, even though the rates of serious crimes are decreasing, people feel less safe than ever before. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve it?
In
this
fast-paced life, now and then
we hear some crime related
news, no matter it is small or big, at end of the day it is an Add a hyphen
crime-related
offense
. Change the spelling
offence
Furthermore
, this
really brings concern to the society as it direct hits to
the Change preposition
apply
saftey
aspect. I would like to throw some light on Correct your spelling
safety
it's
root causes and solutions that could help to resolve it fully or to some extent to have a peaceful living.
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its
First
and Correct article usage
The first
foremost
root cause is a high-tech era. Nowadays digital Add an article
the foremost
techonology
is in Correct your spelling
technology
boom
, wherein statistics Add an article
the boom
a boom
says
that most Change the verb form
say
of
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apply
the
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apply
people
are familiar with TV or Internet or any other digital medias
. It has now become ubiquitous. Correct your spelling
media
People
tend to learn the
things faster through Correct article usage
apply
such
mediums, either it is good or detrimental. For example
, in our neighbourhood, there is a little boy around 5 years and he belongs to well to do family. However
, recently he had hit his friend with some object. Though that incident was not that serious, but
if someone does not stop him Remove the conjunction
apply
doing
so, Change preposition
from doing
then
it can be repeated next
time. Moreover
, when his parents asked him, from where he learnt such
thing and in reply, he simply said Television. This
highlights, nowdays
Correct the word
nowadays
people
are very much influenced by the
Technology.
Apart from that, Correct article usage
apply
secondly
I would like to Add a comma
,secondly
foucs
on the Correct your spelling
focus
surrounding
and status. It narrates Fix the agreement mistake
surroundings
to
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apply
people
's upbringing. Consequently
, if surrounding
is not healthy, poverty, illiteracy, bad companies and many more, Add an article
the surrounding
these
could Correct pronoun usage
apply
also
lead to the
crimes.
There is a solution to every problem. Correct article usage
apply
As a result
, firstly
, people
should have control on
themselves. Change preposition
over
In addition
to that
they should Add a comma
,that
able
to distinguish between the positive and negative Add a missing verb
be able
phenomenon
. There must be Fix the agreement mistake
phenomena
a
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Self control
. Add a hyphen
Self-control
Secondly
, the government should implement certain laws/ punishment
against the crimes. It will not only help to reduce Fix the agreement mistake
punishments
the
crime but Correct article usage
apply
also
help to maintain discipline in the Public. Last
but not the least, ethics related
programme should be introduced in the schools, so that from childhood only Add a hyphen
ethics-related
people
value it.
In conclusion
it is a joint Add a comma
,conclusion
efforts
. Each and every person should be liable towards the Society in order to make it a safe place.Change the noun form
effort
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