Assignment In some countries, even though the rates of serious crimes are decreasing, people feel less safe than ever before. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve it?

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fast-paced life, now and

then

we hear some

crime related

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news, no matter it is small or big, at end of the day it is an

offense

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Furthermore

this

really brings concern to the society as it direct hits

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the

saftey

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safety

aspect. I would like to throw some light on

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root causes and solutions that could help to resolve it fully or to some extent to have a peaceful living.

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and

foremost

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root cause is a high-tech era. Nowadays digital

techonology

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technology

is in

boom

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, wherein statistics

says

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that most

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the

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people

are familiar with TV or Internet or any other digital

medias

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. It has now become ubiquitous.

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tend to learn

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things faster through

such

mediums, either it is good or detrimental.

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, in our neighbourhood, there is a little boy around 5 years and he belongs to well to do family.

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, recently he had hit his friend with some object. Though that incident was not that serious,

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if someone does not stop him

doing

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so,

then

it can be repeated

time.

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, when his parents asked him, from where he learnt

such

thing and in reply, he simply said Television.

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highlights,

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people

are very much influenced by

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Technology. Apart from that,

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focus

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surrounding

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and status. It narrates

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people

's upbringing.

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, if

surrounding

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is not healthy, poverty, illiteracy, bad companies and many more,

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could

also

lead to

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crimes. There is a solution to every problem.

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firstly

people

should have control

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themselves.

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that

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they should

able

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to distinguish between the positive and negative

phenomenon

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. There must be

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Self control

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Secondly

, the government should implement certain laws/

punishment

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punishments

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against the crimes. It will not only help to reduce

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crime but

also

help to maintain discipline in the Public.

Last

but not the least,

ethics related

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programme should be introduced in the schools, so that from childhood only

people

value it. In

conclusion

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it is a joint

efforts

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. Each and every person should be liable towards the Society in order to make it a safe place.

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*Assignment* In some countries, even though the rates of serious crimes are decreasing, people feel less safe than ever before. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve it?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Many feel that the common educational system of teachers and students in a classroom will be replaced by the year 2050

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Governments are encouraging industries and businesses to move from large cities to the regional areas. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

What are the advantages and disadvantages of spending a holiday in your own country compared to traveling abroad? Discuss both perspectives and provide your opinion

Assignment In some countries, even though the rates of serious crimes are decreasing, people feel less safe than ever before. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve it?