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Some believe that people should make efforts to fight climate change while others think it is better to learn to live with it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In the present day with advances in globalization and technologies,
climate
change
 has been increasingly present in our life.
Although
 some
people
 claim the
population
 should mitigate its impacts, others believe in the opposite idea. I agree with society should fight for a cleaner world thinking in the
next
 generations.
This
 essay will discuss both views and I will explain better my opinion. On the one hand, the world is claiming help due to the consequences of
climate
change
. Some
people
 believe that the
population
 just should learn to live with these negative results but I disagree about
this
 idea. If every person would do a thin part, in the end, we would have great and ambitious results because small actions can be valuable and essential.
In addition
,
for example
, if each person thinks that it help is inefficient, nobody will help. The more aware
people
, the more help and better actions we will have. The
population
 needs to strive to fight for the planet. Not only ordinary individuals but
also
 large companies, governments, and influential organizations should endorse the importance of taking care of the planet. Owing to
climate
change
, lands are been cleared which leads to the presence of deforestation and desertification even more ubiquitous.
As a result
, animals and vegetation are decreasing in number because of a lack of natural habitat,
furthermore
,
people
 are losing their homes and suffering from droughts and flooding. Is not acceptable to think
this
 phenomenon is normal and
thus
 we just should wait without any effort. I claim society must do any effort to
change
this
 complex and sad reality. In conclusion,
climate
change
 has been transforming the world into an uninhabitable site. Whether individuals do not anything to overcome
this
 situation, consequences in the coming years will be inevitable.
Hence
, I agree the
population
 should fight to save the planet.
This
 essay argued both views of different opinions about
climate
change
 and I explained my opinion in more detail.
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