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Some cities have few controls over design and construction on housing and office building. People think that they are free to choose the design they like. Do you think the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

#cities #controls #design #construction #office #people
Few cities exercise some regulations on the
archetecture
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architecture
 for
building
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 of homes and workplaces,
however
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people
 are of the opinion that they can select the type according to their likings. I believe
benefits
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the benefits
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 of having supervised development in
housing
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the housing
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 and office sectors outweigh
its
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 disadvantages of individual
prefrences
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preferences
. To embark, some cities have laws in place to regulate the raising of houses
,
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 and offices. These regulations allow the builders to develop
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within
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with in
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within
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 limits, which are based on
saftey
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safety
 and environmental
standards
. These
standards
 include space
requirement
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requirements
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 for
number
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 of
people
, material to be used, and occupational
saftey
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safety
 during the period of construction.
For instance
, New York City administration does not allow constructions, which do not observe rules of space, electricity work, and fire
saftey
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safety
.
Furthermore
, towns discourage buildings
which
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 someone likes, but they do not meet
standards
 to bear the harsh weather conditions.
For example
, one can not construct
office
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an office
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 building which is not can not withstand the extremes of temperatures and requires ventilation features.
On the other hand
, some opine that they can opt for any type liked by them, and is
convinient
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convenient
.
This
 approach
also
 has benefits, as the
people
 who are going to live or work in that building can define their requirements better than
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anyone
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any one
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anyone
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 else.
However
, they will compromise on safety
standards
 and exposing
dewellers
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dwellers
jewellery
 to health and safety risks. In conclusion, cities with
controls
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 over development
is
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 more advantageous to the lives of
people
 living or working there. I believe
positive
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the positive
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 impact of regulated construction outweighs
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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 of personal likings and
conviniences
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conveniences
convenience
.
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