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Some people think that they can make as much noise as they want while others think that the amount of noise people make should be strictly controlled Discuss both views and include your own opinion and examples

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Some
people
 think that a greater amount of
noise
 can be made
them
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according to their needs, while others think that strict action should be taken by the government.
this
 essay will discuss both views. Strict action should be taken against extreme
noise
 because loud
noise
 is very dangerous for
people
 as it can damage your ear .For ,example
compare
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compares
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 to the previous decade
people
 need more hearing aids than before .loud
noise
 can create
noise
 pollution which is not good for society .
For
example
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people
 in hospitals need a calm and quiet environment for quick recovery loud
noise
 could harm their peace and sleep. Many infants and elder
people
 are residing in
a residential areas
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a residential area
residential areas
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 and they seem to be irritated by
noise
. Some
people
 have their thoughts regarding
noise
 freedom. Many think that they can generate
noise
 as per their need. The prime reason for
that is
 to enjoy a function, party or any concert .they seem to enjoy loud
noise
 .they think that
this
 is basic human rights felt offensive when told not to do. Since it is difficult to control
noise
 in the city due to heavy traffic and a lot more activities government should take strict action against
loudspeakerspeakers
Correct your spelling
loudspeaker speakers
 .they should limit the use of speakers and
noise
 frequency should be decreased. I believe that these rules should be strictly followed by
people
 for the betterment of their livelihood .
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