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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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people
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 start working by themselves
instead
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 of working in a company. The reasons for
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 are, they can choose how much to
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 or to plan schedules for what they want.
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, working
on
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 individuals will have some problems, like money. Individual workers can choose what they want to do.
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,
people
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 who
work
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 in companies have to do the task until a predetermined time.
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 will cause stress to employees. So a self worker can
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 the time to
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.
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, self workers can
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 their schedules when they
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.
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, the
job
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 was for
night
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, the owner can close until night, if the
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 was active in the morning, the owner can open in the morning and close at night.
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, starting a new
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 or keeping the
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 to
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 will cost money.
This
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 is a hard thing for workers who
work
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 by themselves. The items for jobs, the
place
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 for
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.
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First
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 they have to get a
place
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 or if the
job
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 was from another person, the cost to keep the
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.
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, they have to get items.
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, the opportunities are owned. From these
disadvantages
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,disadvantages
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 some
people
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 choose to
work
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 at a company.
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, the benefits will
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 by their ability. So it is not known to fail or succeed. In conclusion, working for oneself have many advantages
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 as the time and schedules are free to
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.
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, the money spent on objects needed or location
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 expensive. By knowing these negatives,
people
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 choose to
work
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 by themselves.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employed
  • company
  • organization
  • freedom
  • independence
  • income potential
  • flexibility
  • working hours
  • working location
  • passions
  • interests
  • decision-making
  • business practices
  • disadvantages
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