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Popular events like the football World Cup and other international occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotion In a safe way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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I think conducting famous game's cannot be the fundamental way to maintain strong international relationships. Sports can be one of the reasons for the countries to end rivalry but not an ultimate solution. While, On one hand, Sports can contribute to world peace,
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, If we look closer , two nations are competing with each other. Clearly, there exists a sense of hatred amongst them.
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, Cricket matches between India and Pakistan are always big where full of tensions overflow. In the worst scenario, the troubles caused by losing games affect the players directly. The rival nations have their patriotic emotions explode in an aggressive way. At times, we come across instances, where games can contribute to ending the conflicts between nations. In 2008, Turkey and Armenia teams were set to play a world cup and the Turkish president accepted. Armenia loosened visa restrictions so that Turkish fans could join the game. The match opened new diplomatic channels between the countries. World-famous games like Olympics which are held once in 4 years in different countries welcomes players from
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rival nation with complete devotion. To conclude, Though international sporting events can be one of the good ways to ease tensions, I believe that sports alone cannot promote peaceful international relationships.
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