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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is commonly argued that nowadays many
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 are disappeared. Few groups of people believe that our world has
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 it will be
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 life. I completely disagree with
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 opinion and think that the diversity of
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 is essential.
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 of all, I believe that
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 show the
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 of ancient
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civilizations
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 and
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. Every
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 has
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 story about
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the historical
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 period which reveal the development of traditional and
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. While
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language
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 die out you will misunderstand the traditional things.
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, the local
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 of
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the north
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 region in Thailand was extinct
then
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 could not understand what the aged letter, which is antiques, told us about.
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 why it is necessary to prevent
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 from extinction and it let you know the civilization in the past.
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, it is difficult to force everyone to use only major
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 English, Chinese or French because they are not used
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. In the other words, if they never learn or understand the major
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, they cannot communicate with others who
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 the major
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 in daily life.
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,
Thai
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 people that immigrated to The UK during World War II did not spoke English. They still using
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Thai
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language
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 among Britons people.
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, if
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language
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 was gone. The immigrants would not contact or transfer information together.
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, we should keep diverse
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 to help communicate to avoid
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problems. In conclusion, I strongly believe that it should have
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 variety of
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 are much more crucial than have only the major
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to preserve the cultures and prevent
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incorrect communication.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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