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Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in education of children. Discuss both views and give you opinion.

#people #school #children #homework #teachers #role #education
The issue of
assignments
 in Thai society
are
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 frequently debated in the media.
Although
 more and more people put forward
to
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the
view
 that
teacher
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teachers
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 should not give
assignments
 to
students
, others criticize
this
 and argue that
assignments
 are crucial in
educational
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 system of
students
. Both
view
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 of these contrasting views be analyzed and
also
 my opinion is given in
this
 essay. In my own perspective, I would side with the
first
view
 that
students
 should not be received
assignments
 from teachers. On the one hand, there are good grounds for arguing that teachers ought not to put any
homework
to
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 their
students
. The principal reason is that children will have a lot of stress and depression, due to the fact that
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assignments
 use much time to finish and knowledge to solve the problems.
For instance
, we always see the news about the depression of high-school
students
 which may bring them to suicide. A
further
 point is that children ought to spend time
to do
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 other activities which can improve their life skills and make them happy more than doing many tasks. Yet, other people put forward the
view
 that giving
homework
 has
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a benefit
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benefit
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 on
students
. It is able to give them a hand to practice and review the lessons, owing to the fact that they must use a lot of knowledge in
previous
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 class with their critical thinking to solve the problems.
Moreover
, all
students
 can catch up together by doing
homework
 in order to check
their
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understand
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, especially behind-room
students
. Having considered both sides of the argument, it seems to me that both sides of the argument have their advantages.
Nevertheless
, on balance, I am inclined to believe that the benefit of children should not be received any
homework
 from teachers clearly outweigh the benefit of assignment has a significant role in
educational
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.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Instills discipline
  • Deepen understanding
  • Independent learning
  • Reinforcement
  • Parental involvement
  • Curriculum insight
  • Burnout
  • Student stress
  • Leisure time
  • Relevance of assignments
  • Project-based learning
  • Interactive learning
  • Individual learning styles
  • Conducive study environment
  • Homework policy
  • Balanced approach
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