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University students are increasingly studying abroad as part of their studied. Do the advantages of studying abroad outweigh the disadvantages?

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Studying in other countries around the world is becoming extremely popular among many university students. Despite
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 will far from their family, they will
also
 receive significant
life
 experiences that will
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on
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 their careers.
This
 essay will discuss why the
positive
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 of studying
oversea
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 do in fact outweigh the negative. The main benefit of studying abroad is that students will have
life
 experiences that will improve themselves that impossible if they had have only studied in their own countries. Being in another country leads people
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 an unfamiliar situation that they would learn about how to deal with
this
 condition.
For example
, When I studied in Singapore
as
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 ten years old, I
was struggle
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 with new unknown cultures that I have never met before.
Then
, I had to adapt myself
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survive
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. But, in the
last
of
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 I could overcome a difficult moment and acquired enhancement.
Therefore
, it is developed you to better efficient person.
However
, the challenges that
student
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 will face while overseas was far from their family. They will stay with
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 family and unfamiliar accommodation and
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 will worry about their children
life
 and activities.
For instance
, while studying in Singapore I really miss my mom and sister in Thailand. It was a sad moment and I
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 been crying for two weeks.
Moreover
, In the
beginning
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 student always struggle with the languages that sometimes they never
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 before
such
 as Singapore, people in
those country
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not
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 speak only English or Chinese but they
also
 speak Tamil which is not widespread in the world. In conclusion, expanding of studying abroad for the college students. It
more
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benefit
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 to provide an experience that you cannot find in daily
life
 than
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the drawback
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 that your family worry about your
life
 in another country.
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