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Some people believe that reading stories from a book is better than watching tv or playing computer games for children. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Many people argue that
children
 should spend more
time
 reading storybooks
instead
 of wasting their
time
 watching tv or playing desktop
games
. As a youth of 21st century iI myself am more attracted towards mobile phone rather than reading storybooks so I disagree with the given statement.
To begin
 with, many parents are reluctant to let their kids watch programs on television or play desktop
games
 as they have reason to believe that they could not learn useful knowledge from
this
 kind of entertainment and is a waste of
time
.
In addition
, it is believed that reading
books
 is the best productive way to relieve stress ,
for instance
, a recent survey showed that half of the parents buy more than 5 or 10 storybooks per month.
As a result
, many parents have good reasons to believe these
books
 are better for their
children
.
Moreover
, there are many
games
 and tv shows that help
children
 understand certain educational concepts faster
for example
 scientists have confirmed that playing laptop
games
 can improve a child's imagination and help develop problem-solving skills.
Furthermore
, learning while playing
games
 makes the whole process of gaining knowledge entertaining,
this
 helps them retain for a much longer
time
. To conclude, learning while playing is much more interesting and helpful than just reading
books
,
children
 should be able to choose how they want to spend their leisure
time
, so I disagree that playing
games
 are a waste of
time
 and knowledge can only be acquired through
books
.
Submitted by Ashish kumar on

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