Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

It is widely believed that studying foreign languages in primary schools or
first
year in
school
is more effective than a secondary
school
for
adolescent
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.In my opinion,I will give two benefits and some drawbacks to
this
topic,which will be covered in
this
essay.
Firstly
,learning a foreign
language
is helpful to improve
children
's brain,if they can learn a
second
language
early while they were young
,
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because
that is
the best time to learn new things,they are able to remember a vocabulary faster than older
children
.In the same
way
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children
will absorb a pronunciation in the right way,
also
understand lifestyle and culture of a different country.
Secondly
,
Children
will get
an
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education easily in the future,
such
as top-rank high
school
or top rank university in their country,because nowadays
English
is the main
language
around the world or billion people use
English
for everyday life.
Furthermore
,for the future in the careers
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the
language
will useful to salary,mostly company require an
English
score.
Actually
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English
score is a guarantee to salary.
However
,there is
also
a drawback to be considered.A
school
that have
English
programs or international
school
in some country is very expensive,and obligation will go to their parents.
Moreover
,
children
would learn very hard or much homework as you know
children
did not have only subject in
school
. In conclusion,there is
also
have a lot of benefit for their future and their careers,and the way to get success
also
get some obligations in their life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive abilities
  • pronunciation
  • self-conscious
  • cultural awareness
  • global society
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