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Some people think that uniform at school is unnecessary and should be banned.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Certain individuals argue that having
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uniform
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 at
school
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 is not important and should be discouraged.In my opinion,
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a uniform
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uniform
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 are necessary for specific
school
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 identification and
this
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 essay is going to explain the importance of
school
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uniform
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uniforms
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.
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 of all,
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uniform
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 provide a basis of
identify
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 to explain
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this students
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this student
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 are identified by the type of
uniform
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 they wear
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 a specific
school
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 has an identity associated with the type of
color
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 clothing.
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, students are able to be associate with each other especially during
school
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 games activities like birds of the same feathers flock together.
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,
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uniform
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 provide equity among the learners because they will see each other as equal partners like
in
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 the same level.
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,a recent study conducted by
University
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the University
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 of Nairobi showed that students are able to relate well with
pears
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peers
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 in
school
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 while in
uniform
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.
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,
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uniform
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 promote social
relationship
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relationships
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 among
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school going
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children
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.
On the contrary
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,
school
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uniform
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also
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have
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 challenges because not all parents are able to afford the requirements in monitory terms and
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 some of the uniforms are not available for parents.
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, rural
school
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 who prefer to use home clothes as opposed to
school
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uniform
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.
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, learning can take place without the required
uniform
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. To conclude,I support the idea that every pupil is required to have
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school
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uniform
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in order
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inorder
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 to ease identify and promote social interaction.

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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • uniform
  • unnecessary
  • banned
  • promotes
  • equality
  • peer pressure
  • fosters
  • sense of belonging
  • pride
  • prepares
  • future
  • maintain
  • discipline
  • order
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