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More and more people are visiting historic sites and sometimes tourists damage these ancient sites. The number of people visiting these places should be strictly limited. Do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
 contemporary era, more and more
people
 are interested to have exposure to ancient spots. Few instances of
such
 historical sites being harmed by
visitors
 lead to a thought of restricting the
number
 of
tourists
 allowed to visit,
however
, I disagree with
this
 notion and the reasons for my disagreement are discussed in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
, limiting the
number
 of
people
 to access ancient locations will lead to dissatisfaction of the majority.
This
 is because their entrance would be declined due to only a few who actually was the culprit.
As a result
, the
number
 of
visitors
 shall show a significant decline in a very short span of time.
For instance
, the access to the Alora caves situated in Mumbai was highly restricted after some incidents where
tourists
 repainted the existing arts drawn on the walls of the caves. That limitation in the
number
 of
visitors
 left many dishearted and steadily the site became one of the least visited among all situated in the same area.
Therefore
, allowing a very limited
number
 of
people
 to experience
such
 ancient places would make
people
 unsatisfied and they may not visit again.
Secondly
,
although
 stringently limiting the
visitors
 to allow to view the places can sound fruitful which can minimize the instances of sites being disturbed by
tourists
.
However
, it would make no difference at all because sooner or later when the individuals who intend to make some damages to a place would get access to it, he would surely execute his plans.
Hence
, it may look like a promising approach to tackle the situation but practically it is useless. Conclusively,
although
 the precious ancient sites experience a lot of damages by some deliberate
tourists
 interventions, limiting the accessibility of
visitors
 strictly is not the appropriate measure to deal with the problem. Rather it may show some negative effects.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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