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The media plays a valuable role in keeping us informed and entertained. However, many people believe it has too much power and freedom." Discuss your views on this, giving examples and presenting a balanced argument both in favor of, and against, the power and freedom of the media.

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Recent years have witnessed a fierce debate concerning whether the news is a blessing or a curse. Some hold that both the freedom and power of publishing should be restricted, while others take the view that
this
 is not a problem. I will discuss both two sides and give my own opinion.
To begin
 with, radio, as a publicity means, can give us information. Today, we can get to know what is happening all around the globe either from TV or from newspapers, while barely centuries ago, if we intended to stay informed about international news, we had to rely on word of mouth. It is due to the fast development of the news that we can get access to sufficient information any time anywhere.
Moreover
, the
media
 can
also
 bring entertainment to the public. The lively gossip and vivid stories, as a source of entertainment, give us much fun and satisfy our desire to know about the life and living of celebrities.
Furthermore
, supervision from the
media
 can go a long way towards a high social moral standard. For fear that corrupted activities may be exposed, government officials would not dare to take bribery, nor would superstars do immoral things. No one can deny that sometimes
media
 may invade our privacy, especially that of personalities". The revealed privacy of celebrities, dogged by journalists day and night, would probably cause harm
on
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 their living. But compared with its disadvantages, the
media
's advantages far outweigh. In the final analysis, we may safely come to the conclusion that we should not restrict the power and freedom of
media
.
Also
, we should maximize its merits and minimize its demerits. (278)
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