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Band 4

Please outline your immediate plans upon returning home and your longer term career goals

#outline #plans #home #term #career #goals
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I really say
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thanks
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 you in advance to all of involving individuals of the Chevening program
taking
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 me a great opportunity to studying
master
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 in the UK.
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 essay will indicate that the three steps of the planned consequences after the postgraduate courses including an
immediately
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 plan, a middle-term plan and the ultimate goal.
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, I will apply for a
business
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 international management role of an international company in Thailand after finishing immediately postgraduate.
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 is
my
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 short-term target that I will utilize effectively with all of the management skills and
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fluent communication. Whereas, the relationship-building skills still remain and gently make a new network in a new
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 society with the high potential groups. Over the few-year periods,
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 will be a middle-term purpose that I will apply for joining with a larger international company rather than the previous firm.
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 stage will be enlarged both of the career success targeted to be a senior or
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chief of an international role and the expansion of the powerful communities. For the ultimate goal, I will be hoping that I would like to be one of the
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business women
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 in the international trades, influencing widely to these sectors with a great performance.
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, those positive consequences will be appealing to many investors and
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 owners coming to expand their profession in Thailand. I believe that my country is still ready
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 the side of many multi-skilled
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 including a lot of natural resources. In the
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 decade years, those are my intention to be a part of making more employment with
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higher average income distribution and supporting a better life quality of all citizens. In my perspective, the growth
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 the country level will not only require a large amount of
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investment and
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government operations but
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 need a real leader with the right direction including the good arrangements of many private sectors.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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