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In many countries, paying for the things using mobile phone (cellphone) apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages?

#countries #phone #cellphone #apps #development
The development of technology
such
 as
smartphone
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smartphones
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 and
internet
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the internet
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 has
signifiacntly
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significantly
 changed people life. Nowadays,
use
 of
Internet
 banking that
use
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uses
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 only
mobilephone
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mobile phone
 and irrespective of physical cash
are
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is
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 popular in many
country
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countries
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, are becoming more common. From my point of view,
although
Internet
 banking
make
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 people life more convenient, It can be more easily affected by a number of factors. On the one hand, one of
advantages
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the advantages
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 of using mobile banking is that
use
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the use
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 of money via
mobilephone
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mobile phone
, which only a program and
internet
 is needed, is easy to approach.
User
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The user
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 of
the
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internet
 banking can spend their money in any currency they want to, without exchanging.
Moreover
, they can perform the expenditure regardless of distance and latency, so they can pay their debt to
debtor
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a debtor
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 who is so far within a
second
.
On the other hand
, there are so many obvious drawbacks of using mobile banking.
Firstly
, as
a
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other program
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another program
other programs
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, the program needs
battery
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a battery
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 and
internet
 to perform
application
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the application
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. If
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the user
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user
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users
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want
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wants
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 to
use
 the application in the area
that
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the
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internet
 is lack, or in the situation that all batteries are drained out, the expenditure is impossible. To summarize, it is true to say that using
the
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internet
 banking may offer more convenient life options, but it is impossible to
use
 if only one factor is not ready.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • safety
  • security
  • time-saving
  • cashless transactions
  • dependence on technology
  • privacy concerns
  • accessibility issues
  • financial vulnerability
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