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Under British and Australian laws a jury in a criminal case has no access to information about the defendant's past criminal record. This protects the person who is being accused of the crime. Some lawyers have suggested that this practice should be changed and that a jury should be given all the past facts before they reach their decision about the case. Do you agree or disagree?

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information about the defendant's past criminal record. But some lawyers encourage
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 suggestion in various aspects, in the following paragraphs the reason to support my opinion will be outlined. It is undeniable that criminal cases have increased a lot in
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 few years. Especially, in the UK and AU, the laws and regulations are really rigid in terms of allowance in the past criminal record information.
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 to defend themselves at all. I really agree with the suggestion of the lawyer in which
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 must give all the past facts to both lawyer and defendant before reaching the judgement process
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 are many benefits if people allow
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 the truth.
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 to evaluate and analyze the case correctly. To sum up, the law and
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 in the United Kingdom and Australia should change according to the laws and
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 that restrict people
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