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What are the advantages and disadvantages of living in a large city?

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It is argued that most
people
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 like to stay in a big
city
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 more than
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an urban
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urban
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oneurban
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. The perks of living in a large
city
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 may be uncountable. Many
people
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 have a dream about more convenient
facilities
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 in a large
city
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. At the same time, there are certain folks who like to stay in the claim countryside.
This
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 essay will focus on the discussion about the advantages and disadvantages of living in a capital?
Firstly
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, one benefit of living in a modern
city
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 is huge money. Numerous big companies or organizations
locate
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 in the inner-
city
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 resulting in
a higher employment rates
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higher employment rates
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 than urban.
Secondly
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, the
facilities
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 are one factor
that is
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 interesting to live in the metropolis.
People
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 can easily approach many
facilities
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 that depend on their lifestyle. These include department stores, restaurants, theatres, hospitals, and better transportations.
Thirdly
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,
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in
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large
city
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 life is easier to face others that have the same lifestyle and make
a
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apply
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new friends.
Moreover
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, advantages of large
city
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 life include higher salary, more convenient lifestyle and make a new relationship.
On the other hand
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, one disadvantage of living in a big
city
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 is the higher cost of living compared with locals. Those
facilities
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 are changeable with many expenses
such
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 as rent for condo or house is pretty pricey, high cost of the meal and luxury goods.
Nevertheless
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, the
city
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also
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 produces harmful pollutants that
negative
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 effects
health
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, mental
health
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 and the environment. Air, noise, water and land pollutions interfere with the quality of life. Nowadays many reports have been published about the effects of air pollution on human
health
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. Rhinitis, sinusitis and allergic skin dermatitis may be found in numerous
people
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 in the
city
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 by PM2.5. In conclusion, advantages of living in a big
city
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 include a higher salary, being more comfortable and make a new relationship. while disadvantages of living in a metropolis include more expenses and pollutions that affect
health
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, mental
health
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 and
environment
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the environment
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.
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