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Topic : Some cities create housing areas by providing taller buildings. Others create housing by building houses on a wider area of land. What solution is better?

#topic #cities #areas #buildings #houses #area #land
Nowadays, in many countries,
land
 can
devided
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divided
to
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into
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many
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any
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kind
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kinds
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 of
land
suchas
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such as
 developed and developed areas. The
skyscrapper
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skyscraper
skyscrapers
 may
built
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be built
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 for a lot of
people
 in some city that has limited
land
, while the others give their population a house with huge
area
aroud
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around
 it. In the following paragraph, both of
these solution
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this solution
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 will be discussed in detail before the conclusion is reached. It is true to say that in some cities give their
people
 housing
area
 with a high building
such
 as apartment and condominium which is come with
limited
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a limited
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area
 in the room.
This
 housing
area
 usually
be
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is
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 seen in the capital or industry district that
land
 always has a remarkedly high price, so
this
 is the best solution to tackle
this
 problem.
Moreover
, when a huge number of
people
 stay
wihh
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with
 each other, the civilizations will happen there
such
 as community malls, markets and other a
coutless
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countless
 facilities.
On the other hand
, other cities which is
undeveloped
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the undeveloped
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 city or rural has the
land
 that price is low, so they can provide their
people
 accommodation
area
 with
large
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a large
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 house and some
surounded
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surrounded
land
.
In addition
, most of
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population
populatin
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the populatin
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 in
this
area
 has
occupaton
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occupation
 which is related to agriculture, so
enormous
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area
 should
provided
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be provided
provide
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 to the
people
 who live in the undeveloped areas. In conclusion, both of solutions can tackle the
poblems
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problems
 and give appropriately
life style
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lifestyle
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 that
match
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matches
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 with their
live
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life
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