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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Every
country
 should have a free
health
service
 even if
this
 means that the recent medical
equipment
 may not be available through
this
service
. To provide a non-payment
health
service
 to the
citizens
 by the
government
 can be very expensive and cost a lot for the
government
. I am of the opinion that it should be paid for.
However
, it could be subsidized by the
government
, so as to accommodate all range of people in the
country
, from the low-income earners to the very high-income earners.
Firstly
,
health
 stability is very important and should not be ignored by
citizens
.
However
, if the
citizens
 are not charged any
amount
 at all
the
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service
 provided by the doctors, it will not be valued.
For instance
, a doctor fixes an appointment for a patient, but because the
service
 is not been paid for, it can be treated with negligence compared to if a particular
amount
 was paid for the
service
.
Furthermore
, every medical
equipment
 needs to be maintained for
long
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 life span,
also
 the drugs and treatment have to be purchased when they finish, all thises cost a particular
amount
.
in other
words
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 a non-payment
health
service
 cannot be sustainable for a
country
. When a subsidised
amount
 is paid for the
health
service
,
this
 fee can be sued to maintain the
equipment
.
Also
, paying a reduced fee for the
health
 aid will encourage the citizen to visit the hospital often without an excuse of having to be charged a high cost for the
service
.
In addition
, when a subsidized
amount
 is paid for the well-being
service
 provided,
this
 will help the
government
 to provide adequate
health
 care facilities for
citizens
 in need,
also
 been able to maintain the facilities. On
this
 ,note the recent medical treatment and
equipment
 purchased, can be used but at a subsidized
amount
 and the
health
 maintenance organization (HMO) plan can help provide a wide range of
health
 care services in the
country
.
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